Jules+Bradley

By Julia Bradley

 * Commentary:**
 * "THE MAN FROM SNOWY RIVER" BY A.B PATTERSON**

== [|Man From Snowy River Commentary English.docx] ==


 * Visual Text:**
 * "CORROBOREE ON THE MURRAY RIVER" BY GERARD KREFFT**

== “Corroboree on the Murray river” is a visual text that gives a strong representation of early aboriginal Australia which is conveyed through a white man’s interpretation of their culture. This painting shows the traditional indigenous Australian culture which carries stereotype. == == A strong sense of culture is created through techniques such as use of colour and body position. Shades of black, brown and deep reds are used to create a night time landscape and create an image of the typical Australian bush. Native flora is shown in a rather dark way from use of colours which also highlights the aboriginal figures. This painting conveys a very strong representation of traditional aboriginal culture as it is of a “corroboree”, a ceremonial meeting of Australian Aborigines. ==
 * Poem:**
 * __ "NO MORE BOOMERANG" BY OODGEROO NOONNUCCA __ **

No more boomerang no more spear, Now all civilised colour bar and beer, No more corroboree gay dance and din, Now we got movies and pay to go in. No more sharing what the hunter brings, Now we work for money and pay it back for things, Now we track bosses to catch a few bob, Now we go walkabout on bus to the job. One time naked who never knew shame, Now we put clothes on to hide whatsaname. No more gunyah now bungalow, Paid by hire purchase in twenty years or so. Lay down the stone axe take up the steel, Work like a nigger for a white man's meal, No more firestick that made whites scoff, Now all electric and no better off. Bunyip he finish got now instead, White-fella bunyip call him red. Abstract pictures now, what they comin' at Cripes in our caves we did better than that. Black hunted wallaby, white hunt dollar. White-fella witch-doctor wear dog collar. No more message lubras and lads, Got television now, mostly ads, Lay down the woomera, lay down the waddy, No we got atom bomb. End everybody.

[|No More Boomerang commentary for wiki.docx]

Stereotype: "PENSION DAY" BY ARCHIE WELLER
 * Texts from two genres:**

Subvert Stereotype: "HOW WE FLED WHEN I WAS A GIRL" BY MOLLY NUNGARRAYI [|IMG.pdf] [|How we fled when I was a girl commentary for wiki.docx]
 * Visual text:**



Jules,
 * You have discussed literary techniques in some detail
 * You have provides some analysis of the perspectives


 * You need to complete your visual analysis
 * You need to analyse your short story in more detail
 * You need to improve your paragraph structure

A good effort!

A good effort, but there needs to be more discussion about the literary techniques in some detail. Also you need to provide some analysis of the aboriginal perspective. The visual analysis should be completed. There needs to be more of a analysis of your short story in more detail Also there needs to be more of an improvement in your paragraph structure James Barker